Hey ya'll! I was just wondering if i could get some feedback on this. I am having troubles with chords for a bridge and an idea for a third verse like kill the bitch or something. I don't know that maybe a bit harsh, but you guys catch my drift
intro
C Bb G
C Bb G G
Now I don't know
C Bb G
But I Been Told
C Bb G
You've been out there
Bb F G
Messin' Around
No What do you
Mistake me for
Just some fool
Out on the town
(Refrain)
D C G
Now baby i think its time you learned
D C G
That Sometimes we all get burned
D C G
And i hope i don't see it all go down
Bb F G
Because it sure stings when it comes back around
Now baby you've
Got some type of nerve
Treating me
The way you do
And I'm not gonna
Take it any more
I think its time
You walked out that door
Refrain
daba daba daba Thangoo
PostPosted:Wed Dec 05, 2007 12:59 pm
by Candyman1984
the chords aren't where they are supposed to be, bummer. does anyone know how to change that for future reference
PostPosted:Wed Dec 05, 2007 1:01 pm
by shakedown_04092
Candyman1984 wrote:the chords aren't where they are supposed to be, bummer. does anyone know how to change that for future reference
It will either be a passionate masterpiece or have a very cliche-esque two-timing woman blues feel.
I think it will be the prior!
PostPosted:Wed Dec 05, 2007 9:13 pm
by Candyman1984
Alright Strummin' and Nicolasalk here it is- the rough version of it at least. I recorded it using imovie so it sounds pretty weak, in addition, its only like the 5th or sixth time i've played the song all the way through to the point were i am at-And i think its shaping up to be a cliche-esque blues tune rather than a passionate masterpiece, but thanks for the vote of confidence. anyhow, i look forward to your criticisms
if your taking it the bluesy way try throwing a 7th chord, or alot of em, in there
like a V7
PostPosted:Wed Dec 05, 2007 10:30 pm
by strumminsix
Dig it! Nothing like I imagined! Kinda has that 60s Claptonesque blues vibe where the lyrics are bluesy but the chord progressions are major.
Excellent usage of pauses and meter in the vocals.
PostPosted:Thu Dec 06, 2007 2:56 am
by d-v-s
candyman - I like the track a lot. Thanks for posting the video. I had some ideas for your song, but I've never written a song before, so take it for what it's worth.
1. bridge - i'd throw it in right after that second refrain, and try to start it in an Em - Am type movement . Maybe use this to change the tone of the song a little bit, get sentimental, remember the good time with her, then lead back into the verse where you're still leaving her. maybe transition from the bridge back to the verse by playing the verse chords backwards - G Bb C pause C Bb G. then start the next verse.
2. the last verses - i'd make it something about how you're back on the street and you got a new love, or something like that, and she just keep messin' around.
I don't have a guitar with me, so i'm making this up in my head...sorry if it's all rubbish.
PostPosted:Thu Dec 06, 2007 5:07 am
by CaptainTrips
I really liked it. Good work. But adding some flavor to the chords would liven it up a bit, a seventh here or there, maybe even a sixth, maybe some sustains. But the overall feel is the most important and that I dig.
PostPosted:Thu Dec 06, 2007 7:13 am
by nicolasalk
its great, but i insist.
some minor chords, like d-v-s said
PostPosted:Thu Dec 06, 2007 10:40 am
by GratefulPat
ya its much different than i thought it would be, but indeed very good
PostPosted:Thu Dec 06, 2007 1:37 pm
by BlobWeird
I liked it. And to be honest its VERY rare that I like amateur music. So thats saying somethin good for you haha. Keep it up. Oh and I agree that you should go minor with the bridge and maybe throw some sevenths in the verse
PostPosted:Thu Dec 06, 2007 2:23 pm
by Shaggy
I don't think you need any help! You are doing fine.
